Hi Suaine!
You’ve got a good start to your project page. I have some suggestions, though everyone has their own style, of course...

I followed the link to your visuals for your characters (Derek Hale!! Grumpy cuddle monster of my heart!!) and I think you should put those images on your project page! The cover you have at the link might even be better than the one you have up on Inkshares, since people connect better to faces. Faces are good to have on your book cover.

You should add any links you might have to blogs (that you want to associate with your campaign), twitter, facebook, pinterest, etc etc.

I’d mention the main characters by the names you call them throughout the book in your synopsis - do you call them Captain Pierce and Commander Pham, or Meg and Jasmine? The former sounds more distancing, and you want people to connect with them as quickly as possible.

Other than that, the only thing I tend to recommend is coming up with some comparisons to help people understand your book more easily - "If you liked ___________ and _____________, you’ll love my book!"

"A cross between ___________ and ____________, etc."

"If you loved ________________ but wanted more ___________, you’ll love my book!"

:) :) :)

Hey everyone,

I’m in need of some assistance. I am literally so new to all of this that I don’t really know what a book page really needs to be appealing. What does a book page need to be successful and what is mine lacking?

What can I do to make people look at the page, interact with the story, get some recs or comments?

Please check it out and let me know how I can make it better: www.inkshares.com/books/jump-the-gun

If you’re willing to do deal with the extra logistics, you can find one person who doesn’t mind using their credit card, and get up to nine of the card-wary people to join with them in a group; then that first person places an order for multiple books, on behalf of the whole group and you can redistribute the books later.

First, don’t underestimate that "local" support.  My two books I’ve funded was done almost entirely through personal contacts that I rallied to the cause through various....means :-)  For now, starting out, that local base is your foundation.

Second, I’m not saying go recruit with the message "buy my book and you have to go jump through all these steps!"  It’s hard enough already, that would complicate things.  I would save the suggestions for stuff like this ONLY for people who are wary of using their own card information and express that as the only barrier.