Well, compared to some production value on other trailers on Inkshares, mine looks like the poor kid whose mom couldn't afford a store bought Halloween costume, so he drew some buttons on a cardboard box and called himself a robot. But, it's a start. Thank you for the positivity, though. =)

At first, I was a bit discouraged by the purple prose in the intro paragraph, but as the writing went on it became less flowery and more purposefully descriptive. It does grab you, but there are moments when word choice is almost a distraction.The writing style definitely has some remarkable potential, but I would be cautious of adding pretty words for the sake of sounding pretty or intelligent. There is absolutely nothing wrong with using big or complex words, but use them thoughtfully. Sometimes only one word exactly explains the concept your trying to express, but don't choose esoteric or exotic words for say, color description, unless it's absolutely necessary.

I will say that the style does have a sense of poetry to it, and that I can appreciate. It is definitely vivid and descriptive. I look forward to more.

I had to look this word up. At first, I thought it might be a bit to high maintenance of a word, but after I read the definition, I'm torn. It would be a good way to describe light colored skin other than "white" or "Caucasian", since every other skin color seems to have a descriptive word.