I’m curious to know what happens next. My criticism based on the chapter is that I was interested in what you were doing with comparing his real world to the gaming world, how the gaming world was an escape with that. I hope you continue using that idea. That was what drove me to continue reading. Good luck in your writing!
Maxwell is an everyday working stiff who does the extraordinary as a terrorist in the smash MMO war game "Code of Warfare." Yet what happens when the spectacular bombings and assassinations Maxwell performs in game begin to happen in the real world?
The first chapter is intriguing. The message of what you are trying to provide for the reader is great, how one can get so lost or addicted to something that it becomes real to them. A recommendation, if you haven’t done so yet would be to focus a little more on developing the main character. I don’t know if the character is developed fully further in the story. I would have to read more. I’m interested to see what happens in chapter two.
