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Don’t tell us this information. We end when she is shot on a cliffhanger with a TON of questions. Just blurting out what was in the package robs the scene of one of its major mysteries: What was worth killing her for? 

I would end to scene without this information and let us find out about it organically later on in the story.
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        That is so wonderful!

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