@Nell I’ve been caught on that line several times as well, so it’s nice to have confirmation of it needing a touch up. I’ll hit it in the morning after a bit of coffee! Thanks

I spotted a couple of apparent typos in the prologue: your spacebar got sticky while writing "thelocks" and "awhole," and you have the auto that "was came into the shop."
The trailer does a good job of setting the backstory in motion, but it doesn’t tell us much about the present. I was fully expecting to be reading a story set in ancient Greek times by the end of the trailer.
Otherwise, I really like the premise. The idea of jealous gods fighting each other over a mortal they wish to lay claim to for her powers fits in perfectly with classic Greek mythology. If it weren’t for the modern setting, I’d completely buy the concept as an actual Greek myth, so props for nailing that tone. Lots of promise here, keep it up!

I am participating in Draftshares from May 30th to June 4th, during which time I hope you will consider helping me out: #critiqueme #critiquemypagetoo. My novel is called Reset the System, and I think you are going to love it! But I want to get it right, and so I want to hear as much honest advice from all of you other hard working writers and especially you SF people...you know who you are. Thanks everyone.