Hey, A.C., I quite enjoyed this. There is a lot of info dump, especially in Chapter 3, but it for the most part works because I as the reader find myself eager to learn alongside Alaudae. You’ve found that perfect recipe of the PoV character who wakes up in a nightmare without a clue and is desperately trying to find out all he can to prove it’s not real or find the breadcrumbs that will allow him to figure a way out of it, while his source of information is (mostly) willing to tell him what he wants to know to get him to just accept his situation. Well done.
I say it works "for the most part" because I wonder if there are ways to introduce some of this information or have Aluadae discover it besides Excelsior telling it all to him, but I would have to read more chapters to see where and how that might be possible.
One question: You have made the decision to narrate in the present tense instead of the the more common past tense -- what led you to that decision?
With new partner and kids in tow, a weekend break in a secluded cottage is just what she needs to unwind. But this is no ordinary cottage. This is Nevermore, a place where the past is desperate to claw its way to the future.
College student Jordan risks his life traveling to the past to find and stop the man responsible for the talent show massacre that caused his grandmother’s death.
