I want feedback too everyone!
Lover of science-fiction and fantasy. Aspiring writer hoping to realize his dreams.
Thanks for the feedback - I’ll do another pass and see if I make it easier to follow.
GREAT reveal for the end of the prologue!
“And spear of the Gods you will be, Lord Achilles.”
Data indicated that these people, the Myrmidons, were notorious thieves, pirates, slavers, warriors and general makers of mischief. Apparently, the king liked to haggle. Even with the Gods. Ahriman snorted slightly with amusement.
Data indicated that these people, the Myrmidons, were notorious thieves, pirates, slavers, warriors and general makers of mischief. Apparently, the king liked to haggle. Even with the Gods. Ahriman snorted slightly with amusement.
I’m a sucker for a well worded threat.
I can go to market too, you see
He knew that the shepherds were not best pleased with his depredations and would probably be a bit out of sorts.
