Scott Carss commented on an excerpt of Human Resources
There should be a comma after breath.
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    They hesitated for long moments whilst catching their breath yet the answer eluded them.
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    Scott Carss commented on an excerpt of Human Resources
    Personally I think it sounds better if its it would all be over.
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