Aug 6, 2016

Hey everyone! As promised, yesterday I uploaded the next part of Elyium. In this chapter you’ll find a deeper look at Inkers and their magic system, as well as new information about the culture and geography where Eli lives. Careful readers will begin to pick up hints regarding what this war is really about, too! This part is more than double the length of Chapter 1, but I hope what you find will give you new understanding of the world I’m trying to build. 

I’m looking forward to all of your edits and feedback--you’ve done a great job at helping me so far! However, there is one part of the chapter in particular that I feel needs help. I am not used to writing a particular kind of scene, and I’m not sure I was able to write clearly and intelligibly. (I’m speaking vaguely here to avoid spoilers for those that are careful about that sort of thing, but I think you’ll know which scene I’m talking about when you get to it). So, long story short--everything needs editing, but I feel that scene in particular could use the most work.

And, lastly, I got my first unsolicited pre-order yesterday! It was amazing to get the email saying I had a new backer, open it, and realize I had *no idea* who the person was. Someone, somewhere, found the little I had of Elysium--without me sending them any extra info or encouraging them to take a look at it--and decided it was worth their money. It was an absolutely amazing feeling. Thank you all for following, for commenting and recommending and reviewing--whether or not I win this contest, this has been the best, most consistent feedback and most awesome writing community I have ever experienced. Thank you, sincerely!

--Siriano