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Julian Green and Finn Mcrae commented on an excerpt of THE NORTHERN DIVIDE

This word thew me. Not psychic, too close to physical, I wondered if it was a typo at first. It was jarring and took me out of the text.


Since the opening is very infodumpy as you set the scene with no characterization to draw the reader in, I would find the flow easier if the word was simpler.
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