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You do a really good job of describing action and an effective job of creating the urgency and intensity of this scene.  
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    As the pair stumbled around a corner Joshua risked a glance back and his heart stopped briefly.
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    greasy and laced with dirt from lack of attention.
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    Joshua collapsed against the wall. His lungs burned, throat ached, and side throbbed. They couldn’t keep running like this; if they didn’t find safety soon
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    Nice opening.  OK, I’m in!
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