Kyrr nodded, frowning in concentration. He closed his eyes, and willed the magic to come forth from his body. Sending the tendrils of his power over Lhiweth, he reached into Rhiann’s consciousness and pulled power from her body as well. He shaped his power into spikes and forced them into Lhiweth’s body, forming a barrier around the baby. He tried to extend it and immediately became fatigued. His eyes fluttered open to see his twin looking at him with concern.
Giving birth is a form of torture, no doubt. This phrase reads awkwardly, though.
if it ever decided to stop torturing its mother
A belly wound is serious and very often fatal. Perhaps make more of the fact that Kyrr is a fast healer so that the audience understands why he is up and about with a gut wound.
You took a sword to the belly, you need to rest.
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Author of ’Awakening’, ’Netherworld’ and ’Novice’. Aspiring writer and career mathematician, current...
