Luke Fellner commented on BLACK
I like what you have written so far, but I’d suggest adding more motive and reason.  As you write try to think "Why is he doing this? How will he achieve this?" then try to go more in depth on the thought process behind actions. This is just a suggestion, otherwise great so far!
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    @Luke Fellner : Quite right. My post was worded poorly - I didn’t mean to preclude other’s from looking at your work from this thread. Apologies.

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      Luke Fellner created a forum thread: Strategy Guide
      I made this so other authors can comment patterns they notice with inkshares preorders so people can choose the best time and ways to put their works up for pre-order and to advertise for their book.
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      Hi Luke - I promise to look at The Burned and give you feedback :)
      It is definitely on my backlog - although I admit it is taking me a little while to work through that backlog...
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        July 21st.

        This date is important to me for three reasons. 

        First, at 12:01am on July 21, 2007 I was a recent high school graduate, counting down the days until I started my first semester as a college freshman, standing in a Barnes & Noble with my little sister and and cheering with a crowd of hundreds as cardboard boxes were opened and copies of Harry Potter and the Deathly Hallows were lifted into the air. Years of reading and waiting were coming to an end as I entered adulthood, and the Boy Who Lived was facing off against He-Who-Must-Not-Be-Named for a final time.

        Second, at 3:00pm on July 21, 2012 I ended my final shift as a Hogwarts student. I took off my robe, sweater vest, and Gryffindor tie and left the castle halls. I had graduated college a year previously, but now I was leaving school, leaving Florida, and achieving my childhood dream of moving to New York City and working in the film industry. Little did I know about what the future held for me. A literally rat infested apartment, Hurricane Sandy hitting the city (I thought I left Florida and the hurricanes behind?!), and the many, many, late nights and early mornings required when working on a film set.

        Third, at 5:07pm on July 21, 2016 I walked to the mailbox, slid in the key, and opened the small metal door to discover a cardboard box wrapped in white tape covered in Inkshares logos. My heart skipped a beat, and I didn’t even wait until I was back in the house before ripping the package open. Nine years after I held the final Harry Potter book, a book I wrote was sliding out of it’s shipping box and into my hands for the very first time. 

        Thank you, Inkshares. Thank you, Nerdist. Thank you, every single person who backed my dream, believed in my book, and brought me to this moment. If anyone told me a year ago that this would be happening today, I never would have believed them. I wrote a book, but you all made its publication possible. Thank you.

        This is only the beginning.

        -Zac

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          Looking to answer any questions right now. I’m working on the story and would love to hear from you!
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            Luke Fellner commented on Tell No Tales
            I just read your last comment Adam, I had a similar problem, one thing I learned to do to keep me interested is leave holes to fill in the planning process, that way you can fill them as you write. It helps an author stay interested when the author doesn’t even know what’s going to happen next.  
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              Devin Masters is dead, and a ghost. His new friend Tuck tells him that he will just have to get used to it. Realizing that he and his parent’s deaths may not have been an accident, the two start an epic journey to save Devin’s still living sister.
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              80 pages of first draft done!!! This is usually the point in the past I have lost interest or come to a block, but the story seems to be going along smoothly. Been trying to post a second chapter but have been having trouble. even just copying and pasting into the editor doesn’t seem to be working. I’ll keep trying, as I want everyone to see chapter 2 and 3 as it will show how perspective will change between the 3 characters.
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