Taking some queues from your writing style in that post I’ll assume this is something you are still fairly upset about. I’m sure everyone here gets that - we pour everything we have into our work and so we are naturally protective of it.
I find your situation interesting as it (in some ways) parallels an etiquette question I posted recently on these forums in relation to providing critiques for people.
My thoughts here need to be prefaced with the fact I don’t know:
a) the relationship you had with this person before the incident.
b) the communication between the two of you previously.
I have the following thoughts:
I believe it is proper etiquette to talk to someone before creating a copy of their work and editing it - even if it is for the purposes of providing a critique or feedback.
It sounds like (from the limited information) the person probably had a good intent - you had asked for help and they thought they were helping. In that circumstances, a polite request for them to remove the file should hopefully have been enough to resolve the matter.
It sounds like the situation between the two you may have escalated with both of you becoming upset. I hope the two of you are able to resolve it and move forward. If you are able to - I suggest agreeing on an approach in advance for the next time you have a similar situation - possibly where the author wants suggestions on changes, they create the google doc and share it with their collaborators, with the permissions set so the collaborators can only suggest changes.
Good luck!
I agree with the comment before me although I’m not confused. I know the whole sequence is a battle scene but the constant switch in timeline in the narration gives it a kind of dreamy effect that creates the illusion that this isn’t the middle of a battle. I kinda like that feel but my opinion is that this whole Chapter can use a bit of restructuring for clarity. For example, the term of Ungier can be introduced straight away after the 1st three paragraphs rather than towards the end. I would also suggest re-arranging the Chapter according to a more linear time-line.