Antimony Noon commented on an excerpt of Spectrum
Thank you! I agree, it needs to be a bit more concise. I could probably drop the physical description out of the middle of the sentence.

Edit: Have updated that paragraph, would be interested to know what you think of the new one!
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    I like the past between these two characters that this suggests, with minimal explanation.  I love the friendship between them that the reader can instantly fill in the gaps of. 
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