I’d appreciate any feedback for my first few chapters. It’ll take about 17 minutes to read through all 4, but I’m sure it will keep you interested. Any feedback will be helpful!
@Chad Legge Great job at being descriptive and writing down what the eye would say if it could write (paraphrasing The Book Thief, good movie). Reading through this is like reading a painting. One thing I’d like to suggest is going further into the thoughts of Faux. But overall, great job!
When Faux’s latest contract goes bad he’s forced to run or face the noose. Lost and alone, a chance meeting soon has him scouring the countryside for a lost religious artifact. What they find however may upset the balance of the world, and the Gods.
I’m happy to say I’ve posted the next few chapters. These three segments show Jay’s perspective. I hope you enjoy them, and any comments will be appreciated!
@Scott CarssThank you for the input, I’m looking at editing these sections, what I’m trying to get across was that he was angrily whispering, but angrily whispered doesn’t sound very good.