this is good, and the setting of the scenes is nicely descriptive and things flow really well. As for the story, I have a lot of questions, which I'm sure you will answer as the story goes on. Great start, will read more.
Embark on an adventure that leads Maxan, a cunning fox, to uncover technological marvels and truths about his world that will forever change the fate of all species, be they animals, or mankind itself.