What I enjoyed most about this project is its strong imagery. I was blown away with how this author used their words to weave an interesting setting. There's a lot of mystery to this project, that alone makes me want to read more.

It's a fun read Owen, and I like the anticipation you build with the reader, not knowing why and for what job he's arrived for. Once you discover who he is, the attitudes, thoughts, and actions of someone that's just been hired, along with his attention to detail becomes brilliantly appropriate. I'm looking forward to chapter 2.

Wow! I am very impressed with the writing & vivid inagery. It immediately draws the reader into the story. The end of the chapter was Totally unexpected! Now, I really want to know the back story leading up to it!!This section about the 'strange medal' makes me very curious, too...As I gently set it back down one particular medal caught my attention. One I’d never seen before. One I’d never even heard of. A dark violet ribbon with three silver stripes through the middle held a hexagonal medal made of what looked to be lead. On it where seven stars connected into a strange foreign constellation. There was some writing around the outside in an alien script.  Alien??? Hmmm!Imerest & curiosity definitely peaked!! Can't wait to read more!!

I like the unimpressed style the detective carries with himself as he observes his surroundings and his characters... Can't wait!

Great opening, I'm already starting to feel the main character.  If the booze is going to be important to this guy (male protagonist?), Id like to know more about his choices.  Whisky in the car (maybe a cheap Irish whisky?) makes sense. The stuff in his car might be just whisky to him.  The drink he pours himself though, that deserves some attention.  The selection can tell us a lot about the setting. His choice can tell  us just as much about him.  The bar was loaded, but he went with a familiar favourite, 18 year Glevlivet. Or something...
Got to cut this short, havent read it over... good work, hope this helps!

You really capture the hard boiled detective feeling in your style of writing, I really like stories like that myself and am curious about how you will mix that with the fantasy elements in later chapters. The premise certainly seems interesting, and you have a way with describing the environment in a detailed way without taking the reader out of the story. Well done. I would like to know a bit more about our protagonist though. His personality does come through but we know very little about him. I'd like to know more about the man we are following on this journey.