Done Deeds is certainly engaging from the start, as the action sequences and tone draw the reader in to the story effortlessly. From reading the premise and comparing it to the sample, I can see how this will be a great addition to the genre. If I had a criticism, it's that there simply isn't enough online!
Done Deeds is certainly engaging from the start, as the action sequences and tone draw the reader in to the story effortlessly. From reading the premise and comparing it to the sample, I can see how this will be a great addition to the genre. If I had a criticism, it's that there simply isn't enough online!
The first part of this epic is very well written, though some mistakes where spaces are left out, the text is very pleasant to read. I love the way you describe everything and I truly feel like you get a sort of idea of what the environment looks like. You set a mood in this short text that is chilly and scary, which comes across very well.Although, as a lover of details and rich descriptions, I would love to see some more shades of the spectrum. Some words like "ex-wife" seems miss placed in a fantasy like this. Perhaps "former wife" would suit better?All the luck to You!
You’re correct - I’m aiming for an emotional distance here - I don’t want the reader to be too connected with this character, but intrigued enough to continue reading.
*SPOILER ALERT*
The premise of the book is that Sir Ronald Deeds daughter has been kidnapped and this sets back on the path of adventuring, with his ex-wife. This is the kidnapping, but it’s not the daughter being kidnapped: she’s the one who set the trap, kidnapped someone similar in appearance and sent the ransom note to her father... end of spoiler.
Sir Ronald Deeds hung up his sword years ago but duty calls! There’s a princess to save, a mystery to solve, treasure to be had and a lady to woo. However, adventuring today is not what it used to be...
