Join Tari on her epic adventure through loss, chaos and turmoil as she fights to control her unsuspected powers and stop a God’s destructive path to dominance in order to save the world of Vanharlm.
Well, not much to critique page-wise so I’d suggest putting up a longer blurb (after the initial short one catches and draws people to your page, they’re going to want to know a little more!) and some info on what inspired this story, what you like about it, what your hopes/thoughts are about it, etc.
For the story itself, very rambling. I enjoyed the dry, biting sarcasm but it felt rather wordy at times - lots of name-dropping that, to me, cluttered up the story, especially in the beginning.
Overall, you’ve definitely got something here and with a little polishing, it will draw those SF hungry crowds in! =)
The Inkshares Authors Anthology - submit a poem, essay or short story loosely related to our futuristic fiction, Journey. Email entries to myklwalsh@yahoo.com. Entry deadline is [open]. $100 advance to winning entries and an ongoing royalty share.
The Inkshares Authors Anthology - submit a poem, essay or short story loosely related to our futuristic fiction, Journey. Email entries to myklwalsh@yahoo.com. Entry deadline is [open]. $100 advance to winning entries and an ongoing royalty share.
