I like this very, very much. Look... Stories about time travel are complicated, because understanding time travel is complicated, because in the real world there’s no such thing! So, of course, writing about this stuff is HARD. But right here, you’ve established a very important RULE for how it will work in your book. Dead come back to life, so in a sense, souls are tied to time. I’m interested to see where this leads.

This is an incredible opening, Kaytalin... It’s got a mass of visual appeal / imagery, but it also makes a really, really important point. I can tell there’s a purpose buried under the layer of words, like soil. There’s a story buried in HERE. And then you deliver the ’Not usually’ below, and it’s like the hairs rise on the back of my neck. Something is UP with this. 

It really depends on the approach of the commenter.  I’ve had plenty of critical comments on my projects, but I am not sure if that’s because of a persona the person was trying to exude or if they really disliked my book enough to rip it to pieces. I will say that I tend to leave both types of comments, because I like to help authors improve -- especially when they ask for feedback. In the past authors really appreciated my tactfully pointing out elements of their samples that could be approved up. Again, it is all in the intent of the commenter.  Scathing critique doesn’t really help writers only demoralizes them, and it certainly doesn’t help funding projects get more orders.

Hey, Bryn! Me too. Not counting credits, I’m planning on throwing down real-world money at least once a month. It’s a good way to give back, and also get a good book in return! One-person "Splinter" syndicates, onward!!!