Oh hwahwhaat?! I thought they were being attacked for a sec! Make it a little more clear that this is like a teleportation spell, if you can. Reminds me of Yennefer in the Witcher 3 and those awesome fire-ringed portals she throws up. Good stuff! (Also, you mean ’alone among nature’ right?) 

I’m a little confused by this image. Are they beating their fists proudly, like gorillas or something? That seems quite out of place since they just got reprimanded by their princess... On that same note, her reprimand seems super TAME considering this dude almost tried to slap her with a piece of metal! Are these special rules of your world, though, where royalty isn’t so revered like we normally think? Seems like something needs to be clarified.

Odan Marki.  Is this correct? It’s hard to introduce a character by two names so close together. An idea for how to fix this: you can tell the readers what Saran already knows when she FIRST sees Lord Marki lift his helmet up (a few paragraphs above). Just say "This was Lord Odan Marki, the non-believer, the naysayer, the bane of anything Saran ever tried to do..." (Of course, maybe leave off those details, but you know what I mean. - then we’d have both names.)

I think you’re doing a good job of showing action, but maybe in trying to be as quick as possible, you’ve lost a little of the visual detail. Like, I’m not so sure what this looks like. Are these ’barbs’ part of his gauntlet/armor? Is he swinging a flail at her? A spiked mace? If it’s a fist, then, I got thrown off by the verb ’rattled’ - just a little inconsistency is making it hard to see what’s going on. Still, I can at least SEE that this Marki guy wants her dead. Good conflict here.