“I should be so lucky” Murdoch quipped back with an exaggerated hip shake.
“You know I might just marry you someday if you keep this up” Domenicalli joked as he reached for the cigarette and coffee simultaneously.
Nice bit of "showing not telling" for the Sanchez character.
Hoping no one noticed she quietly placed a hand on each forehead and recited a quick prayer before before standing.
This paragraph is an effective use of imagery and social observation as a means of character development.
Domenicalli looked around at the circus that a high-profile murder such as this created
Thank you for a compelling opening. These first 2 paragraphs do a good job of getting me curious and interested right away.
stared at the remains in front of him and his heart fell through his chest and into his shoes
This is chilling. Really nice imagery.
it’s beauty marred by a single seeping hole in an otherwise perfect forehead
