Reader, writer, maker of pointlessly elaborate renaissance dresses and collector of increasingly rid...
Reader, writer, maker of pointlessly elaborate renaissance dresses and collector of increasingly rid...
Reader, writer, maker of pointlessly elaborate renaissance dresses and collector of increasingly rid...
Agreed as well. I love this as an introduction to the characters, but we really need a hook here into what the main story is about. This might mean just extending Chapter 1 a bit, but even if it’s just a glimpse, it’d be good to get a sense of what’s on the horizon.
I’d like to see a bit more of her reaction here? It’s quite a sudden declaration of "I’m moving in with you", it’d be nice to get a sense of how her mother feels about that.
Mom said, leaning forward and taking my hand.
I instantly like him for this.
Brian sighed, shook his head, and handed the towels to Mom. He shuffled into the kitchen and called over his shoulder. “Tea or Cocoa?”
I’m actually really enjoying that she’s more angry about this than her mother (who I’m assuming is his former wife?)
