I feel like something is missing from this sentence.
Color me intrigued. I’ll be keeping an eye on this!
Let me start by saying that I really dig this premise, and I want more. The idea of the government coercing a vampire into hunting a dragon is nifty as all get-out, no doubt about it. I want to know who these agents really are (I like that they remind me of "Agents" Gordon and Wallace from Sneakers), I want to know what Jones knows and how he knows it, and I want to know more about both Stephen and this dragon.
That said, I definitely have some frustrations with this scene, and I’m going to keep an eye on this project and watch for new and updated content before I say more. Whatever you do, Mr. Welsh, don’t stop writing!