See, reads better than if you’d used a bunch of semicolons here =)
Burn something down. Kill somebody. Find the means to re-develop gender or something.
hmmm, I don’t see a need to say "things called drugs". Either they were drugs or they weren’t.
I chuckled at this line -- thank goodness there’s still tv shows in the future! xD
and for the sake of The Hive, retain something…don’t just wipe your frontal lobe every week to make space for Survivor VR Season 97
Nice subtle world building and foreshadowing of past events that will, I’m sure, have an effect on the future of the protagonist.
We all know about the Mercury dismantling project corruption that kept me from the final ten this year.
So many semicolons bothers me. How I’d write this: "A level playing field, they say. A fair shake. Equal footing -- a Marxist’s wet dream."
A level playing field they say; a fair shake; equal footing; a Marxist’s wet dream.
