The stories that I have grown up with have been a huge part of my life and who I am today. I want to...
Nitpicking here but, if your story is in present tense, shouldn’t this also be in present tense?
In the years immediately following the second Great War, the influence of the western world hung heavy on the islands in the waters of the South Pacific. The harvest of new economic resources provided a wealth of prosperity to those who could afford the gamble. While most rushed to invest in the new found abundance, others merely planned to steal it …
Sounds like the sound reveals the hair of the girl
The sound of splashes a few yards out in the clear waters reveal the long, wet hair of a native island girl swimming
Agreed, nice detail, but wouldn’t there also be the sound of a body hitting the ground? haha
Glistening like lethal black cats low in the water, the two warplanes creep toward the yacht.
Moving across the wide expanse of ocean water, a large sailing yacht gleams in the clear sun lit day.
