Dr.Berkly was crying getting the antibiotics out of the white medicine cabinet .I saw Fred talking with Erny about stuff like if 5 antibiotics and many surgeries working out they might have to cut a flipper off.I saw mom getting new blankets from the donation pile for the turtle .I also saw Coralee trying to get the turtle to eat. “Oh could you help us with getting the xRay on”mom said .I agreed I went over to where Fred and Erny were to turn it on.It was a complicated machine but I’ve used it many times before. “Make sure it on adult turtle because last time it was set to young dolphin”Dr.Berkly yelled .I heard the turtle whimpering but I got back to work and pressed number eight for adult turtle and a bunch of other things and turned it on.Everyone went quiet so the turtle wouldn’t move.We heard the loud beep.
Ah Ha! is this the mysterious Olive Ridley? I understand that it must be hurt. I think you should try and mention this important fact earlier in the story.
I like this part of the story. It makes me feel like I’ve met Carra and her Mother. I can feel the love and humour they share.
I saw the little seagull my mom helped me tag after it hurt it’s wing ,I called him Fly.It actually mom and I used to play a game when I was about 8 years old ,that whoever found Fly first in the morning had the other person buy a smoothie or get one from the fridge for them.
I like this. It really gives a feel for the hard life the truck has had. All rusted and scratched from all the beach sand.
I’m pretty sure he’s been in the water with that thing a lot
I guess that this is some kind of creature, perhaps a bird? Not all readers know all the things you know (this is one reason they might want to read your book, to find new things out). Perhaps you could include a short description in the story so that the reader can get excited about the thing Carra has seen.
