everyone knows Ravonaar does not like her
repetition "approached the room" and "entered the room"
approached the room, and had seen his black eyes as Neiran had entered the room
There are a lot of "he"’s in the room right now. Use the name of the person you mean, here.
He squinted at the stranger.
This was a surprise. Perhaps, since you’ve mentioned Abraxas so many times before now, mentioning that he is a demon before now would allow the audience to get used to the idea. It certainly explains why he intimidates people.
This transition seemed a bit jarring. Consider rewriting it to flow better from the conversation he was having with Cadoc to being in the Throne room.
The door closed softly behind him, muting the din from the hall. Ravonaar strolled to the Throne Room, where Abraxas was waiting with a messenger.
Is there supposed to be a scene break here? It reads like there is.
