As for my game, it is a massive undertaking of a D20-based gaming system. I’ve integrated about... I think 8 or 10 unique systems into it? Like in comparison to a standard 1st Edition D&D being compared to 3rd edition they added class set ups, feats, and skills. 3 things, all common in the Dungeons & Dragons world. I’ve integrated in depth lore-based racial character design. Instead of 5th Edition Dungeons & Dragons system of "Oh, well, you get this, and that’s it." I added different aspects to the character’s race that offers choices you never had before in any tabletop other than GURPs that really described your character before. Everything about your character is called a "Racial Trait" describing the special traits specifically made around your character. You have statistics (Height, Weight, Age, Sex, body benefits - Physical & Mental spectrum), Strengths, Weaknesses, and Specialties, Special Abilities, and Powers. Each race has about 3 pages of information attached to it just about information related to the character you wish to play. If you thought my 32 race Fantasy Craft had a lot of races, I did say this game was my greatest undertaking. There are hundreds of subraces, variants, templates, racial adaptations, changes, and benefits between 15 initial races that literally make your character yours. Then there are about... let me get the exact number of different systems: Sorry, miscounted there are 14 other systems other than the one I just described to you integrated into the game. It’s early morning, no coffee yet. Well, as I said, I poured my heart & soul into this game. There is only one problem. The game is time consuming in developing characters, initially. Deciding what you want to play with so many options, you can spend hours trying to figure it out. After you come to that, getting really detailed is basically all about the character. I wanted to make a game so lore-based, it actually is an encyclopedia of fantasy lore. So without revealing much, I think that should explain a little bit about this game related to the book I am writing.

I just finished writing the conclusion! Looking for some tips when it comes to editing. Feedback is always welcome.

Unfortunately this is something that is very intuitive on the website. The only way to add a review to someone’s work is to open one of the excerpts (not just open the project page). If you are in the full view of an excerpt there is a review button in the bar at the bottom of the page.

@Nicholas E. Efstathiou The paragraph that’s describing Doctor Moran’s room near the beginning of the chapter seems like it’s too soon. I recommend having his first bit of dialogue, "Have you been obsessed with books for a long time?" be before the paragraph describing the room, it seems like it would run smoother that way. The rest of your sample is great and is near flawless. But I’d like to suggest maybe making August more eccentric, it’s only a suggestion, I don’t know if that would actually fit into your story, but it seems like something to consider.