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Overall, I felt the pacing was perhaps too expository. While, I thoroughly enjoyed reading it, I felt that perhaps some of the details could have been realized through character action or interaction BUT it's only the Prologue and what it does is fully setup up the world. Great work.
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    While this is engaging, I thought, "Who died? until I read on.
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