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through

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"in front of"

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I’d remove this and just have "body fell forward"

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finally died, and then

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This feels a little clunky? "like the tail of a comet" would read more smoothly.

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like a comet does with ice and rock as it soars through space

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Thank you! I hadn’t spotted this.

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