JB Minton commented on an excerpt of Nowhere Man

Nice flash back. Succinct and effective at telling us who this guy was.

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    How long has he had with this experience? I hear grown accustomed to and think it's been a while but the scene feels like a first reaction. Something to consider.

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      I’m right here!
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      I can't wait to find out how worthless this paper money is now. Great set up!

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        as many one hundred dollar bills as I could into my pockets
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        I like this sentence for its simplicity and weight but  consider making it more active. Feels too passive.

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          At this moment how desperate I was became apparent to me
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