The second book in the Metal Heart trilogy. Scarlett and Rabbit escape the National Service Academy and flee to Mexico, in an attempt to cure the nanovirus. Available for purchase on Amazon.
I... almost want a 'reminder' of the world you're setting this in here. These guards need to be on-edge. War is coming. They're frustrated they can't be on the front lines, or happy about it, are they corrupt? Lots of little details you could throw in here in the dialogue between guards to establish the world a little better. Still, even without these, your story's moving along NICELY. I like it.
Well.... I LIKED this chapter, but I don't think it's quite done yet. There is no breadcrumb trail that leads me into the second chapter, nothing set up. It can't be "just Iatus" here on his own, so to speak. Let's get some start to the whole thing that he's going to be a MAGE! In ROME! That's what will hook me all the way.
