“That is not how the rules of this game work. She will be returned to her human form, provided you bring me what I have asked for. But for each cycle of the moon that passes without the delivery of the Star-born the rose will begin to wither. Take too long and she will die. It is your choice how long she suffers.”
Careful now. We wouldn’t want to damage any of her petals…
Once again- did we establish this was his sister? I was wondering who Thyra was and why she would be so important to the prince.
His sister had disappeared.
Is Cirs also a prince... I don’t remember seeing that established. I figured he was just a court member on a mission or a servant of the crown.
You need to clarify that before referring to him as the prince b/c the reader thinks the only prince here is Kieran.
Something about this line just doesn’t work for me. I think it is b/c you have established a more prosaic dialogue style from the fae and this seems to casual.
“The queens have come to strip everyone of the gifts they bestowed thanks to your brother’s foolishness and the breaking of the accords between our kingdoms.
"want, Cirs?" Just add a comma.