Jacob Larch commented on an excerpt of After the Greenlands
We switch from third person consideration "should he try to finish the task or should he take his life" to first person "If I take my life I will be free"- it felt jarring as a sudden switch in use of words? 
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    Should he try to finish the task or should he take his life? If I take my life, I will be free. But, is freedom enough.
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    Jacob Larch commented on an excerpt of After the Greenlands
    This strikes me as a perfect chance to let the reader in on the senses of the character, even if he is driven by the overwhelming emotions of the hunt. Opportunities like this give the reader chance to connect with Gunner's humanity, if he has any, or not. It's true, you don't have to comment at every turn about what he's feeling and so forth, but finding a baby, especially one so important later on when the alarm is raised, is a powerful, iconic moment of irony: innocent life in the midst of what is about to become death. 
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      The first door was open. In there lay Charlotte, the Master’s newborn baby. Gunner wondered who the mother was, but a snore from the end of the hallway refocused the boy
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      Jacob Larch commented on Deltas
      Nice idea: strong, clear, and vibrant. Looking forward to reading a sample chapter!

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