The idea for tweaking fairy tail motifs the way this project suggests caught my eye right away while scrolling through the stuff here on Inkshares.
Then, I was delighted to find that the writing is solid and the characters are wonderful.
If the world were fair, Evelyn Radcliffe would be a successful businesswoman. Instead, she’s got two dead husbands, two teenage girls obsessed with marrying princes, and not a single fairy godmother in sight.
It seems that unstable, hormonal teenage girls are possibly the most difficult characters to write...possibly because their real-world behavior can seem like a caricature, so it’s an uphill battle to make their behavior believable? I’m limited in my experience so my knowledge is only so useful...my little sister had all her crazy dramatic phases between 9 and 12, then she calmed down.
I don’t know if there’s anything necessarily wrong with how Falchon’s written here, but it could be that I’ve just seen this type of exchange done too many times.
It could be all it’s missing is something small and unique to set Fanchon apart from all the other hormonal teenagers out there. Maybe Henry says something that gets through to her for a moment. I’m not sure. I feel bad bringing up something and not having a clear direction to move in to improve it.
