He spoke from behind the dark veil of the night to her, "Mary Ann...Mary Ann..."His voiced crackled with the malice of a thousand tortured souls. Her eyes fluttered open, surprised and unable to focus. She stumbled further along the wall. "I’ve been watching you Mary Ann; you might say I’m an admirer."
I should warn, though...there’s always a risk when you get everyone excited and then transition to introduction a new character. You don’t want to let us down too hard, especially this early on.
Maybe...start with the creepy dialogue down below (the "Mary Ann...Mary Ann" part). THAT part is super interesting. Maybe start with that and then kind of backward-engineer the descriptions you build in the paragraphs that precede it.