I’ve read Chapter 9, and I like where the story is going. Setting up a conflict between the ship and The Matriarch is something that I’d like to see further developed, as well as how the conflict presents itself as the story progresses.
There are some inconsistencies regarding capitalization and punctuation usage, but I’m nit picky about that stuff. I went multiple different proofreading passes on my book, always finding small, minor, but still things that were painstaking for me to find and to have to fix.
What is the purpose of the sentence in the first paragraph "Well, yelling to be more precise." You already said you heard screaming, what is the difference?