Discussion

Hunter Red · Author · added over 4 years ago
I’ve read Chapter 9, and I like where the story is going.  Setting up a conflict between the ship and The Matriarch is something that I’d like to see further developed, as well as how the conflict presents itself as the story progresses.

There are some inconsistencies regarding capitalization and punctuation usage, but I’m nit picky about that stuff.  I went multiple different proofreading passes on my book, always finding small, minor, but still things that were painstaking for me to find and to have to fix.
Reader Writer · Reader · added over 4 years ago
I finally made time to read this and I LOVE the story so far (9 chapters).  Derrick I wish you the best and look forward to more.  
Derrick Hopkins · Author · added over 4 years ago
I wanted  to denote the difference in tone. Screaming is more panic/fear based while yelling is seen as more confrontational/anger induced.
Edward Annatone · Reader · added over 6 years ago
What is the purpose of the sentence in the first paragraph "Well, yelling to be more precise." You already said you heard screaming, what is the difference?