Hi Jennifer. Read chapter one and was intrigued, so I have pre-ordered. I hope you don't mind me saying, I think the tone and characters are great, but there's a couple of small things with the language I think you could change to make it flow a bit better. Also one tiny bit where the viewpoint character seems to shift. But the plot is drawing me on, and the world seems very interesting. (Also, I don't want to just wade in and start making complaints - just my opinion :-). ) Looking forward to reading more. Best, Jamie.
Chapter two is resubmitted for everyone to read! It's been polished and rewritten, with some major new material I hope you enjoy. I had a lot of fun with this chapter, and I hope you have fun reading it. In this chapter you will get to see why Elder Malachi was urging our boys to hurry, and you'll get your first glance at a Supplanter!
All, thank you for the support. Things have been progressing well... I hope to edit and update chapter 2 soon, if not tonight then tomorrow. There will be some big changes, mostly because I feel this chapter is a lot of talk and not a lot of plot forwarding potential. So, until then! Thanks again for all the support and I hope to hear from you soon!
I accept all criticism, and I give away no spoilers. With that in mind ask any and all questions you want, and tell me honestly what you think of my writing style.
Chapter 3 is posted! Remember to pre-order my book if you like what you are reading!
All, thank you for the support. Things have been progressing well... I hope to edit and update chapter 2 soon, if not tonight then tomorrow. There will be some big changes, mostly because I feel this chapter is a lot of talk and not a lot of plot forwarding potential. So, until then! Thanks again for all the support and I hope to hear from you soon!