Img 20160806 023915 Luke Fellner · Author · added over 6 years ago
I enjoyed the first chapter. You did a great job at establishing the setting and setting the foundation for the story to grow on. There are a few areas where the words bunched together, you might want to skim through and fix these. I personally wasn’t too bothered by this, but a lot of people get touchy when it comes to individual words. Good job and keep up the good work!