I like what you have written so far, but I’d suggest adding more motive and reason.  As you write try to think "Why is he doing this? How will he achieve this?" then try to go more in depth on the thought process behind actions. This is just a suggestion, otherwise great so far!

     I am very new to writing. This is my real first attempt. It is a draft and has never been edited (so I do apologize). The book was meant to be a trilogy. I am offering everyone a sneak peak of the first three chapters for free, and hopefully it will spark enough interest to be published one day.  The book is roughly 400 pages long  with 20 Chapters and a Prologue (which I am also posting).  I hope you enjoy it!