I left my high-level praise on Twitter, but wanted to add a lengthier comment here.  

When I heard about the project and read its “cover copy,” my only concern was how the sister and her storyline would be portrayed.  The father and son seemed like an entirely possible scenario, but without a deft hand the sister could have devolved into pure cheese.  Therefore, it makes me smile to see how well you handled her.  Instead of trepidation about her being the weak link, you’ve already shown a veteran-like skill in being able to make her believable.  In fact, I find myself most excited to see how she evolves as a character and what she’s capable of.  Kudos on a job well done, sir.

Again, keep up the good work.  You’ve got a *very* promising opening, and I feel like it’s showing signs of being one helluva story!

Sincerely,

Andrew Monge