Moments like these just make the story sparkle. Its like a really good soda, fizzling and cold, I want to drink it cause it taste so good. This is a excellent way to introduce their friendship. And still Sublime.
Arjasoot folded their arms together and gave Chunky a flat look. “Look, Chunky,” they said. “You know I don’t like to tell you how to live your life…”“But you’re going to tell me anyway,” Chunk grumbled.
That’s different,” Arjasoot said, their flames flickering soft.“Is it, though?” Chunky asked. “Yes,” Arjasoot growled, their long, eyebrows burning white-hot.
In three lines you compact multiple emotions, all flaring up at the same time at the reader. Sublime is happy with you lad, he is happy.
That’s different,” Arjasoot said, their flames flickering soft.“Is it, though?” Chunky asked. “Yes,” Arjasoot growled, their long, eyebrows burning white-hot.
Sublime again. This is one of the smoothest use of ellipses in horrific but comedic WTF scene and tone change I have seen yet. I love how casual yet well placed this is.
The Bandit took a step back in terror......and practically threw himself into the arms of the horde of living corpses standing right behind him."Churning Hells!" Arjasoot swore, leaping back into the ring of campfire light.
What the fuck is " released their grip on the chain floated back gracefully"?
Need a comma lad, try "Arjasoot released their grip, the chain floating back gracefully" No not that either. how bout" they released their grip on the chain, letting it float back gracefully" Also this is Sublime Violence, kept fucking asking me to fucking sign in if I tried to copy and paste for discord.
