Caren, I have enjoyed reading the drafts of your chapters for Henderson House. Your "period" descriptions and phrases draw me into Bartlesville, OK and make me feel like a friend of the book’s characters. Although both the First Chapter and your Alternative First Chapter are each written well,
I prefer your original First Chapter which introduces Bessie in a way more fitting to her character. The details about her work should remain, but be woven elsewhere in the chapter. I can’t wait to read your book when it is published..
An enchanting boardinghouse tale of sisters, secrets, and later-in-life romance, Henderson House invites you to pull up a rocking chair and lose yourself in the heartaches and hopes of 1940s Oklahoma.