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Flaki commented on an excerpt of Aftermarket

past perfect feels somewhat unnatural  here to me, for some reason - I feel "..seconds later he pokes his head.." to be a nicer fit, maybe?

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    Flaki commented on an excerpt of Aftermarket

    appears too often (second time here)

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