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Maybe cut the extra word to help with flow? Once again just a suggestion. I really like it, so these are only minor things. 
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    Is there another way you can say "gang members"? Does the the gang have a name? Just a thought :)
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      SoulNet, the artificial afterlife both created and run by the MegaCorp Charon. The promise of a Heaven or Hell is a game changer when you can quite literally show people it. Not much survived their rise to power, and what remains is their plaything.