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Heather Meloche commented on an excerpt of Deep Breath

That's a really sharp, visual sort of imagery. Nice!

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    like they breathed in so hard, for the air that wasn’t there, that they shrunk in on themselves
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    Heather Meloche commented on an excerpt of Deep Breath

    This is ALMOST over the top, but the last sentence - "she had been such a good cat" - saves it and turns the tone to something almost dry or mockingly disillusioned.

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      How noble could they be if they let my cat die?
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      Heather Meloche commented on an excerpt of How to be Hit by a Bullet

      This whole paragraph hits really nicely, understated, logical, but you can feel the transition, as Gavrilenko says, from boy to man.

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        Mercifully, the old Menshevik does not turn and witness this betrayal.
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        Heather Meloche commented on an excerpt of How to be Hit by a Bullet

        That line stands out, a kindness now serving a greater goal later. Nice!

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          The old Menshevik does not realize it, but he is creating a true believer, an ideologically driven monster born of his compassion.
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