What about establishing some sort of "safe" word that is unique to your character for existing out of the Jack. It may be a bit cliche and taken from from the tokens used in the movie "Inception", but it might be a cool way to ad personality if you have multiple users later in the story who Jack in.
When you jack in, it always feels like you’re falling. Falling from so high you can’t see the ground, but then it comes rushing up at you like an asphalt wave and you know when you hit bottom it will break you in two.
When you jack in, it always feels like you’re falling. Falling from so high you can’t see the ground, but then it comes rushing up at you like an asphalt wave and you know when you hit bottom it will break you in two.
This paragraph, especially the first sentence, feels a bit stiff. After the great opening this sort of comes out of nowhere talking about a city.
From on high, as I fall, I see the city. It’s no city I know, but it wouldn’t be, since it isn’t IRL. IRL – in real life - the acronym used to mean something to me, something I thought was significant. But it isn’t important anymore, not the way it was. IRL is the place other people can see. Virt is the place I visit when I jack. Once I thought the difference was that one of them was real and the other wasn’t. I stopped thinking that a long time ago.
