“Perhaps I could trade him for a more mature replacement. Any six year old would suffice.” “I am wounded, Rhia.” He had closed his eyes and was looking nothing of the sort.
I’m assuming this is the main character now. I’m not sure it’s such a good thing to wait so long to introduce the main character. I mean, the stuff you wrote earlier was beautiful and nice, but kinda dry without someone to attach to, you know?
The young woman bent down, gripping the dark shaft of the arrow and pressing her other hand to the deer’s flank as she tugged it free.
I’m not sure what this is. If it’s a proper noun (as in a race or something similar), it should probably be capitalized.
Great opening line for the first chapter. Love it.
Picture, if you will, the faun.
